Hello, Hello, Poetry Peeps!
Thank you, Buffy, for hosting Poetry Frday this week! (The link to Poetry Friday is at the end)
Our topic this time 'round is REWRITING, RECYCLING.
I've been crushed for time these last few weeks, navigating between getting out the vote for the California primary, a trip to see my dearest relative in Northern California (I live in Southern CA) who is going through a very difficult time, a trip to see our wonderful daugher-in-law and son (aka our kiddos) in Albuquerque, and taking off in a few days on another trip with the aforementioned kiddos!
I'm excited...and, okay, exhausted. (Aren't we all?!?)
A WRITER ON HALLOWEEN by April Halprin Wayland
I push open
the heavy door.
I take out the cleaver, the machete,
the switchblade, the scalpel, the
penknife,
the X-acto knife.
I plunge my arm into the oily
black pile of drafts
and haul one out.
And though it screams a thousand
deaths,
I stab it over and over and over
with the cleaver,
hacking it in two.
Then I amputate.
I sever. I cut.
I carve. I slice.
Finally,
I mince words.
I take a breath and step back to
admire my bloody work.
Then…I drop it back into the oily
depths,
pack away the knives,
wipe the black spots off my desk
and leave.
I close the heavy door.
I will come back.
Tomorrow.
To do it all
again.
©2026 April Halprin Wayland all rights reserved
CHANGE
I pinch a pink pig,
gash a green grape,
coil a coral curl,
roll a red rope,
bend a blue bow,
swerve a cyan swan,
then share what I make!
But...
hey, don't change that!
No pig wears a hat!
No swan puts rouge on!
Oh, wait—that's a squid.
I like
what you did.
©2026 April Halprin Wayland all rights reserved
Here are three questions for you:
>Do you love or hate to rewrite?
>How does your critique group help you make a manuscript or poem better?
>How many times did you revise this week's blog post?
I can't wait to read your answers.




A Writer on Halloween made me laugh out loud--kinda perfect. Or maybe it needs more hacking? I returned to change a few words in thi week's poem and post after I had pressed publish now...
ReplyDeleteBuffy ~ that makes me feel SO MUCH BETTER...I tweak and tweak and tweak it...is it every perfect enough?!? Nope.
DeleteLOVE your poems, April. These lines, in particular, made me smile:
ReplyDeleteOh, wait—that's a squid.
I like
what you did.
Re your questions, in general, I enjoy revising/rewriting, though I find it harder with poetry than prose. Perhaps because with poetry it already starts with so few words.
My critique group helps me see the weaknesses in a piece and also helps me become aware of assumption I make that others may not.
Carmela ~ I like your last line...that your crit group helps you become aware of assumptions you make that others may not. When I read books that I don't completely get, or don't ring true to me, that may be what those authors have done: make assumptions that all their readers will readily identify with or understand what the heck they're talking about.
DeleteApril, this post was really helpful! I'm afraid I do not rewrite much. I would like to take out the cleaver and switchblade and machete and scalpel, etc. and do some rewriting! I usually just write a first draft and call it good on blog posts and poems. I love "I mince words" in your Halloween writing poem. I was at your UCLA extension class recently (thank you!), and I have poems from our activities to review and revise! Maybe I should start there.
ReplyDeleteThat's interesting, Denise--that you don't rewrite much--I rewrite TOO much...looking for the PERFECT...where--but where? So glad you took my class--it's always a treat to finally meet someone (if only on zoom) who I've known from Poetry Friday!
DeleteApril, Thanks for sharing. Rewriting is harder than the inital writing. It's a gift when there is enough time to do it properly. I don't rewrite my blog posts, although I do proof them. I will, however, rewrite a Medium post until either I am happy or my editor is happy with it.
ReplyDeleteCarol ~ I hadn't thought of that...but you're right (at least for me): rewriting is harder than the inital writing. Hmmm. I just wrote a poem today that I understand, but I'm not sure my critque partner will. I look hearing back from him...
DeleteOMG-- the killing of your babies, told in poetry! Zing!
ReplyDeleteMost of the time, I relish revision -- once I get that cleaver in my hand. It's getting to the kitchen to begin where I procrastinate. But, as in the best scary movies, the call is coming from inside the house! Eventually, I have to take charge.
The way you couched your comment makes me laugh, Patricia...I am cowering in the corner of this horror movie in progress!
DeleteHmm...if I wrote a poem about revision, what metaphor would I use? Probably something from gardening. Maybe I'll work on that after I finish the PF rounds! Thanks for the inspiration!
ReplyDeleteI haven't come back to my blog until now, Mary Lee ~ sorry! I'd love to read your poem employing a metaphor of a garden and rewriting. Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteThanks, April. Your Halloween poem is perfect! I do enjoy the revision process, although I admit it is sometimes hard, especially when killing darlings is involved. But finding that elusive perfect word is a wonderful feeling and worth the effort.
ReplyDeleteI haven't come back to my blog until now, Rose ~ sorry! Yeah...killing those darlings feels so WRONG...and necessary; both. Thank you for reading my post.
DeleteI love revision stages. The hacking, the carving, the smoothiing, the perfecting. LOVE it. :)
ReplyDeleteWow, Karen ~ you LOVE revising! I guess I love some parts of it, too... but I always wander back to the original to see if I hacked too much off. I just want someone to tell me when it's time to stop!
DeleteOh my goodness! Your two poems are amazing. Spot-on! You have a start to a collection of poems about writing! Yay!
ReplyDelete1- I love to revision. Putting the MS or poem away, then going back and being inspired, seeing what the new thoughts are adding to my words. The magic is in the revision, I think.
2-I have three groups, and they each add great insight and often see things I totally missed or had not thought of.
3-Oh my. Many! Ha Ha!
Thanks for a great post!
I haven't read comments on this post until now, Cathy ~ sorry! Thank you for that idea of putting together a collection of poems about writing. I certainly have MANY poems on that topic. (Don't we all?)
DeleteAnd yes to putting the manuscript or poem away for awhile. I call that "letting it cook."
You're in 3 critique groups!? Wow. One member of my critique group is also in another crit group. I understand how that could work...but it's too much for my already overwhelmed brain to fathom. Especially given that we meet in person and there's Los Angeles traffic to navigate--oy!
I like the levity in both of your poems, and wow that first one, I'm still laughing at all that slashing. I don't mind the revising, I mind the wee bits of time I have for everything, as mentioned in your post. Enjoy your visits and thanks for all April! ☺️ 🦋 🌻
ReplyDeleteI haven't read comments on this post until now ~ sorry! Yeah...how do we squeeze everything into our lives and make it all work? Thanks for stopping by, Michelle!
DeleteMay I steal our Play Doh Exercise, April? :) It's BRILLIANT! As, of course, your two poems are in capturing both the physical AND emotional aspects of Revision...which so suprisingly, I have come to love. Thank you for being YOU!
ReplyDeleteOF COURSE you may offer your students the Play Doh exercise, Esther. It's SO MUCH FUN! It also smells good. (During the pandemic I ordered a Play Doh smelling perfume...and was so excited to try it. But it didn't smell anything like Play Doh...darn!)
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