tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post2525443515624709197..comments2024-03-17T12:30:03.009-05:00Comments on Teaching Authors--6 Children's Authors Who Also Teach Writing: Revising a PoemCarmela Martinohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15543808551988338496noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-49142938470439848062011-10-15T13:58:37.878-05:002011-10-15T13:58:37.878-05:00My favorite part is about the line break. Great s...My favorite part is about the line break. Great stuff!Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12463332371535167975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-9196126419244086232011-09-27T07:56:52.808-05:002011-09-27T07:56:52.808-05:00Laura, & April, thanks for your comments--I...Laura, & April, thanks for your comments--I've been out of town & just found them. I hope to get back to this draft & revise it some more!JoAnn Early Mackenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17812079420917080829noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-90729877969838902872011-09-23T02:09:15.322-05:002011-09-23T02:09:15.322-05:00Fabulous poem, Joann--chock full of tips that are ...Fabulous poem, Joann--chock full of tips that are hard to remember. Merci beaucoup!April Halprin Waylandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10760393691320267240noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-9450167774258393642011-09-21T21:46:56.287-05:002011-09-21T21:46:56.287-05:00JoAnn, This is SO clever. I swear, this should be ...JoAnn, This is SO clever. I swear, this should be on a poster in classrooms and poetry studios everywhere! I love the photography analogy and all the examples woven in. Smart!laurasalashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13807781795919555208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-71593532604269304422011-09-17T08:48:53.838-05:002011-09-17T08:48:53.838-05:00Thanks, Amy! I tried to think about the different ...Thanks, Amy! I tried to think about the different stages of revision from big picture through final details.<br /><br />Teacherdance, yes, I sometimes wish it were easier, too--but then I also enjoy a good challenge!<br /><br />Myra from GatheringBooks, the ICL workshop is online at http://institutechildrenslit.net/index.php?board=11.0. I believe the conversation will be archived. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem!JoAnn Early Mackenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17812079420917080829noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-56306100205657860352011-09-17T02:14:29.607-05:002011-09-17T02:14:29.607-05:00I agree with 'teacherdance's comments abov...I agree with 'teacherdance's comments above about you being able to put everything so crisply. Lovely suggestions - sounds easy but extremely difficult to do. <br /><br />Have fun with your teaching and your lecture. Would have loved to attend that one.<br /><br />Here are my favorite lines:<br />'Look at language.<br />Does it whir where it should snap?'<br /><br />The electric whirring and the vibrating snaps of poetry. So beautiful. Thank you for sharing this.GatheringBookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04477710897574769648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-32387045525857623802011-09-16T22:52:33.252-05:002011-09-16T22:52:33.252-05:00What fun, to put it all together so crisply. I wi...What fun, to put it all together so crisply. I wish it were that easy, don't you? I too like "Try not to say/in a roundabout way/what one word or two/could do."Linda Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14983144542632353870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-59078326504820865292011-09-16T20:48:07.132-05:002011-09-16T20:48:07.132-05:00This is a lot of fun while it teaches! And it mak...This is a lot of fun while it teaches! And it makes me think about all of the different types of revision I go through. What a great poem for writers young and old. All best with all of your teaching! A.Amy L Vhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03830987204619914326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-89656139167192685262011-09-16T13:18:55.465-05:002011-09-16T13:18:55.465-05:00Thanks, Marti!
Joyce, I'm glad I'm not al...Thanks, Marti!<br /><br />Joyce, I'm glad I'm not alone! The Institute of Children's Literature Guest Speaker Workshop is all online--feel free to join in!JoAnn Early Mackenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17812079420917080829noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-54565028960639988832011-09-16T12:20:46.313-05:002011-09-16T12:20:46.313-05:00"Listen.
Does the rhythm match the tone?"..."Listen.<br />Does the rhythm match the tone?"<br /><br />This is my particular challenge, JoAnn. I haven't mastered the tone and rhythm part.<br /><br />Very nice poem. Good luck with your talk!Joyce Rayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02905709719444916488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3934041490878801751.post-79519872139110025062011-09-16T10:33:47.134-05:002011-09-16T10:33:47.134-05:00Thanks for sharing this draft, JA. I especially li...Thanks for sharing this draft, JA. I especially like:<br />>>Try not to say<br />in a roundabout way<br />what one word or two<br />could do.<<<br />That's my goal in novel-writing as well as in poetry-writing. Happy Poetry Friday!Carmela Martinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15543808551988338496noreply@blogger.com