Thursday, June 18, 2026

2 Poems About Rewriting


Hello, Hello, Poetry Peeps!

Thank you, Buffy, for hosting Poetry Frday this week! (The link to Poetry Friday is at the end)

Our topic this time 'round is REWRITING, RECYCLING.

I've been crushed for time these last few weeks, navigating between getting out the vote for the California primary, a trip to see my dearest relative in Northern California (I live in Southern CA) who is going through a very difficult time, a trip to see our wonderful daugher-in-law and son (aka our kiddos) in Albuquerque, and taking off in a few days on another trip with the aforementioned kiddos!  

I'm excited...and, okay, exhausted. (Aren't we all?!?)

So, instead explaining how I rewrite, here are two poem about rewriting:

A WRITER ON HALLOWEEN by April Halprin Wayland

I push open

the heavy door.

I take out the cleaver, the machete,

the switchblade, the scalpel, the penknife,

the X-acto knife.

 

I plunge my arm into the oily black pile of drafts

and haul one out.

And though it screams a thousand deaths,

I stab it over and over and over with the cleaver,

hacking it in two.

 

Then I amputate.

I sever. I cut.

I carve.  I slice.

Finally,

I mince words.

 

I take a breath and step back to admire my bloody work.

Then…I drop it back into the oily depths,

pack away the knives,

wipe the black spots off my desk

and leave.

 

I close the heavy door.

I will come back.

Tomorrow.

To do it all

again.

©2026 April Halprin Wayland all rights reserved

The next poem is based on one session of my 10-week picture book class. That day is all about rewriting. It's my least favorite class to teach, because basically I'm showing my students that it's not always a walk in the park. As most of you know, it can be a long slog to get a book published (New Year at the Pier took nine years from first draft to publication). 

One of my favorite exercises in this class, to lighten things up (after they are stunned by how long it takes, how every detail matters, and how hard it can be), is to hand each student a can of Play Doh and give them seven minutes to make a character—human, animal or something else. 

When time's up, each student shows the class what they made. This part is fun. 

Then, every student moves one chair to the right, sitting in front of someone else's creation. Their assignment is to make one major change to the character.  I give them six minutes to do this. 

When they are back in their seats, I say:"Congratulations--you've just been edited!" 

Then each student shows us what their "editor" did, and shares how they felt when their beloved creation was changed. 

It's a fun way to think about this process.

CHANGE by April Halprin Wayland

I pinch a pink pig,

gash a green grape,

coil a coral curl,

roll a red rope,

bend a blue bow,

swerve a cyan swan,

then share what I make!

 

But...

hey, don't change that!

No pig wears a hat!

No swan puts rouge on!

Oh, wait—that's a squid.

I like

what you did.

©2026 April Halprin Wayland all rights reserved

Here are three questions for you:

>Do you love or hate to rewrite? 

>How does your critique group help you make a manuscript or poem better? 

>How many times did you revise this week's blog post?

I can't wait to read your answers.

Thanks again, Buffy, for hosting!


posted with love and a little help from Sadie, our hilarious pup:

catching some zzzs with her favorite suffies, Peacock and Skull


"C'mon," she says, on our hike

"Stop posting so we can play!"

#toobusy #rewriting #poemaboutrewriting

22 comments:

Buffy Silverman said...

A Writer on Halloween made me laugh out loud--kinda perfect. Or maybe it needs more hacking? I returned to change a few words in thi week's poem and post after I had pressed publish now...

Carmela Martino said...

LOVE your poems, April. These lines, in particular, made me smile:
Oh, wait—that's a squid.
I like
what you did.
Re your questions, in general, I enjoy revising/rewriting, though I find it harder with poetry than prose. Perhaps because with poetry it already starts with so few words.
My critique group helps me see the weaknesses in a piece and also helps me become aware of assumption I make that others may not.

Denise Krebs said...

April, this post was really helpful! I'm afraid I do not rewrite much. I would like to take out the cleaver and switchblade and machete and scalpel, etc. and do some rewriting! I usually just write a first draft and call it good on blog posts and poems. I love "I mince words" in your Halloween writing poem. I was at your UCLA extension class recently (thank you!), and I have poems from our activities to review and revise! Maybe I should start there.

Carol Labuzzetta said...

April, Thanks for sharing. Rewriting is harder than the inital writing. It's a gift when there is enough time to do it properly. I don't rewrite my blog posts, although I do proof them. I will, however, rewrite a Medium post until either I am happy or my editor is happy with it.

Patricia Franz said...

OMG-- the killing of your babies, told in poetry! Zing!
Most of the time, I relish revision -- once I get that cleaver in my hand. It's getting to the kitchen to begin where I procrastinate. But, as in the best scary movies, the call is coming from inside the house! Eventually, I have to take charge.

April Halprin Wayland said...

Buffy ~ that makes me feel SO MUCH BETTER...I tweak and tweak and tweak it...is it every perfect enough?!? Nope.

April Halprin Wayland said...

Carmela ~ I like your last line...that your crit group helps you become aware of assumptions you make that others may not. When I read books that I don't completely get, or don't ring true to me, that may be what those authors have done: make assumptions that all their readers will readily identify with or understand what the heck they're talking about.

April Halprin Wayland said...

That's interesting, Denise--that you don't rewrite much--I rewrite TOO much...looking for the PERFECT...where--but where? So glad you took my class--it's always a treat to finally meet someone (if only on zoom) who I've known from Poetry Friday!

April Halprin Wayland said...

Carol ~ I hadn't thought of that...but you're right (at least for me): rewriting is harder than the inital writing. Hmmm. I just wrote a poem today that I understand, but I'm not sure my critque partner will. I look hearing back from him...

April Halprin Wayland said...

The way you couched your comment makes me laugh, Patricia...I am cowering in the corner of this horror movie in progress!

Mary Lee said...

Hmm...if I wrote a poem about revision, what metaphor would I use? Probably something from gardening. Maybe I'll work on that after I finish the PF rounds! Thanks for the inspiration!

Rose Cappelli said...

Thanks, April. Your Halloween poem is perfect! I do enjoy the revision process, although I admit it is sometimes hard, especially when killing darlings is involved. But finding that elusive perfect word is a wonderful feeling and worth the effort.

Karen Edmisten said...

I love revision stages. The hacking, the carving, the smoothiing, the perfecting. LOVE it. :)

Cathy Stenquist said...

Oh my goodness! Your two poems are amazing. Spot-on! You have a start to a collection of poems about writing! Yay!

1- I love to revision. Putting the MS or poem away, then going back and being inspired, seeing what the new thoughts are adding to my words. The magic is in the revision, I think.
2-I have three groups, and they each add great insight and often see things I totally missed or had not thought of.
3-Oh my. Many! Ha Ha!

Thanks for a great post!

Michelle Kogan said...

I like the levity in both of your poems, and wow that first one, I'm still laughing at all that slashing. I don't mind the revising, I mind the wee bits of time I have for everything, as mentioned in your post. Enjoy your visits and thanks for all April! ☺️ 🦋 🌻

Esther Hershenhorn said...

May I steal our Play Doh Exercise, April? :) It's BRILLIANT! As, of course, your two poems are in capturing both the physical AND emotional aspects of Revision...which so suprisingly, I have come to love. Thank you for being YOU!

April Halprin Wayland said...

I haven't come back to my blog until now, Mary Lee ~ sorry! I'd love to read your poem employing a metaphor of a garden and rewriting. Thanks for stopping by!

April Halprin Wayland said...

I haven't come back to my blog until now, Rose ~ sorry! Yeah...killing those darlings feels so WRONG...and necessary; both. Thank you for reading my post.

April Halprin Wayland said...

Wow, Karen ~ you LOVE revising! I guess I love some parts of it, too... but I always wander back to the original to see if I hacked too much off. I just want someone to tell me when it's time to stop!

April Halprin Wayland said...

I haven't read comments on this post until now, Cathy ~ sorry! Thank you for that idea of putting together a collection of poems about writing. I certainly have MANY poems on that topic. (Don't we all?)

And yes to putting the manuscript or poem away for awhile. I call that "letting it cook."

You're in 3 critique groups!? Wow. One member of my critique group is also in another crit group. I understand how that could work...but it's too much for my already overwhelmed brain to fathom. Especially given that we meet in person and there's Los Angeles traffic to navigate--oy!

April Halprin Wayland said...

I haven't read comments on this post until now ~ sorry! Yeah...how do we squeeze everything into our lives and make it all work? Thanks for stopping by, Michelle!

April Halprin Wayland said...

OF COURSE you may offer your students the Play Doh exercise, Esther. It's SO MUCH FUN! It also smells good. (During the pandemic I ordered a Play Doh smelling perfume...and was so excited to try it. But it didn't smell anything like Play Doh...darn!)